what is wrong with this sentence? Thanks for sending me that story from The Baltimore Sun.?

Need to have correct punctuation and capitalization in these sentences. Thanks for sending me that story from The Baltimore Sun. Yes, I read it to Minnie right away. Now she wants an elephant of her own.

Those seem correct to me...

Thank you for sending me the story from "The Baltimore Sun." Yes, I read it to Minnie right away, and now she wants an elephant of her own.